Shir [Depth dwellers] [Competition]

Ok Geki here we go and before I begin please understand I am writing this to help you not to hurt you in anyway. But I will be harsh and I will tell you what you could have done better. I do this to Chrono and everyone else too.

The pose is beautiful and well executed. I love how dynamic it is yet, it is also forced and not making a lot of sense. Fish still need to use their side fins so his hands or at least one hand should be trying to swim too. The tail fins look like seaweed there is no structure when fish have structure in their fins. Now I am not saying make them stiff and perfect, but do not make them so loose they seem formless. You need a happy middle to achieve greatness. This colouring style or should I say painting technique does not suit you. It is sloppy and muddy. Those are horrible things to have in a drawing! Especially a drawing of a character with such vibrant colours. The sea is not as dark as you depicted it. It is vibrant like nothing else, but not as vibrant as the little mermaid. What you did with the water on the surface is brilli9ant and beautiful. Backlight instead of weirs light source would have been brilliant if you had done it. The vibrant reds in his scheme are dead and completely brown now which adds a dull glow to this. The skin tone is so pale he looks nearly dead. No blush or pinks to give off life. His anatomy looks so off as well I like what you did yes. But it looks like he has very little torso and no hips. The tail also looks shorter than it should be with an awkward curve to it especially since the bottom of the tail should be smaller. It would give perspective if you had done that. What I do not understand is why you kept the staff and anchor so bright when everything else is so dark. It draws the attention away from your subject. Now I understand mermen breathe under water, but even fish give off breath bubbles and movement creates bubbles! So you need bubbles to liven it up! Now you may be thinking I am done, but I still have issues! You attempted I background I see. Yet it looks like you hated it and darkened it all up and darkened the rest so you can't see it! It's frustrating. it looks so boring and dead! The ocean has so much going on her itself down there and is so bright with so much depth, yet you didn't show any of it! There are so many things that are just so forced the hair is another. It looks matted and dead with split ends and his eyebrows look drawn on by a two year old. It could have been executed so much better especially by you. You have the ability to make this your best piece and blew it! I would love to see you redraw it in the future with all this in mind.